You should have started the story with. "The war... The war never changes" Besides that Fallout is also one of my favorite series, even though I must admit that I still wish they kept it in the original form rather than the FPS, but at least they are still doing something with the series.

I didn't really read whole story yet, just first few paragraphs, but it seems good so far... I will try to finish reading it later and maybe can give few pointers, though I cannot correct your grammar.